Revision issues

My intro was hastily worked up, so it needs work. I have a problem with lengthy sentences, so I need to work on that. A couple of my peer reviews mentioned a short story as being good for an attention-getter. I would love it if I knew of a short story to talk about. But I don't. *sigh*

First draft

This is really hard. I've got two and a half pages and I can't think of anything else to write. Maybe I should read more of my sources. ;)

Logical Fallacies

So my sister and I are in the car, it's kind of warm out and she wants all 4 windows down while we drive. That sucks, cuz the air goes all over the place and whips around and it's loud. I want 2 windows on one side down cuz then the air goes in a nice circle and it's a lot quieter. She says, "Well, you want consistency, but I want freedom!" False Dillema. It implies that freedom cannot be obtained without inconsistency. She gives two options when in fact there are many.